Haiku Society of America Student Haiku Awards
in Memorial of Nicholas A. Virgilio
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Student Haiku Awards for 2001
Randy and Shirley Brooks
judges
We enjoyed reading the submissions to the Virgilio competition for 2001. We admired the straightforward language of these haiku and were especially drawn to the playful irony of their observations. ~ Randy & Shirley Brooks
autumn wind
rattles the glass —
a child’s breathTravis Moore
School of the Arts, Age 13, Grade 8, Rochester, NYThis wonderful haiku takes us to the window, beside the child, looking out at the autumn wind. We feel the chill of autumn and the force of the wind as it rattles against the glass. The focus on the breath, suggests the child is having trouble breathing, that each breath rattles, perhaps with a cold or congestion. Maybe the child is home from school for another reason and the breath is just a sigh that he or she cannot go outside to play in the autumn storm. Either way, we feel the chill of autumn and connect with this child looking out the window. This haiku conveys a sense of being alone, cooped up in the house, remembering sunnier days that will not return until after the coming winter had ended and the child has recovered a more ordinary breath.
walking
the pumpkin patch —
children’s faces aglowBrooke Erschen
Wahlert High School, Age 18, Grade 12, Dubuque, IAWe like how this haiku features children in the pumpkin patch. Their faces are aglow with the excitement of Halloween as they seek the perfect pumpkin. They imagine the jack-o-lantern they could carve from each one, seeing an ear or furrowed frow in the shapes of orange skin. Their faces are aglow—so alive—with possibilities. Another autumn haiku, but this time with the warm glow of a sunny day in the pumpkin patch. The children in this haiku are excited as they run from pumpkin to pumpkin, imagining the jack-o-lanterns they will carve. It is so hard to find the perfect pumpkin, so they must walk the entire pumpkin patch. And the sun is shining on their faces and on all of the potential faces of the pumpkins—such a glorious celebration of the autumn afternoon full of the warm oranges of the pumpkins and the ruddy cheeks of the children.
from the tanning salon
to her car
January chillDeborah Meyer
Wahlert High School, Age 18, Grade 12, Dubuque, IAOur third selection also focuses on someone walking outside, this time from the tanning salon to her car. Of course, the point of having a tan is to let others see it, so we imagine her long bronzed legs or some skin being exposed to the cold air as she scurries to her car. Despite her efforts to resist the seasonal changes in her appearance, she must live in a world of changing seasons. The reality of the January chill intrudes on her desire to perpetuate an endless summer look. We feel the goose bumps of the cold air as she hurries to her car. Even though the young woman is resisting nature, the January chill forces her to accept its power in her life. In the middle of winter how else can someone work on their tan? Maybe they are planning a spring break getaway to a beach and want to be ready. However, the reality is that it is still winter as she is reminding on her way back to the car after a relaxing tanning session.
strep throat
she kisses him
anywayHeidi Streit
Walhert High School, Age 17, Grade 12, Dubuque, IAWe love this senryu. What a hoot. Teenage love. The invincible, fearless youth, willing to risk all for a kiss. This is the kiss he or she has dreamed of for weeks. Nothing will stop it now. Not even strep throat. This senryu works so well because it starts with “strep throat” so she knows what she is “getting into”. The anyway suggests a slight, perhaps flippant, risk analysis that is ignored. Sometimes we just have to face the consequences, the inevitability, that love is a risky business. On the other hand, kissing someone with strep throat is just stupid (from a grown-up’s perspective). Another winter haiku, but this time indoors with a sick child or lover. We like the different ways this haiku can be read. Is it a mother caring for her sick child, who bends over the sick bed and kisses him even though he is sick with a fever? Or, is it a young lover so in love with her boyfriend that she doesn't care if he is sick. Or is it that she is sick? She kisses him anyway, wanting to share everything, even strep throat with her lover. However you read this haiku, we feel the hot skin of the person with strep throat. And we admire the love and dedication shown in that kiss.
after the dentist appointment
sister returns
all smilesKatherine Welter
Wahlert High School, Age 17, Dubuque, IAOur fifth selection also emphasizes relationships. Why is the sister smiling so much now? Did she used to have braces? Has she got a new tooth? A new crown? Has she had her teeth cleaned? Has she quit smoking and the dentist praised her tartar-free teeth? No cavities? For whatever reason, the sister is now proud of her self and happy with others. She can't help but smile to everyone she meets. She returns all smiles with her own smile. She has smiles for others even before they ask for one by smiling at her. Truly this has been a great dentist appointment, and the sister has been transformed into a smiler. Maybe the brother should go to the dentist and get some smiles too! We liked the simplicity of this haiku. Sister is showing off her clean teeth. Perhaps she was not so eager to go to the dentist, afraid she might have cavities. However, now it’s over. She got a clean bill of health from the dentist. Look Ma, no cavities!
new beau
fingering the tattoo
with her nameKali Smith
Wahlert High School, Age 16, Grade 11, Dubuque, IAThe final selection is another haiku of romance entanglements. How exciting to have a new beau! It's so fun to get to know each other, to learn all about each other, to share everything with the new lover. This haiku has the intimacy of someone tracing the lines and letters of the tattoo with their finger. The interesting question left up to the reader's imagination is WHOSE name is on the tattoo. Is this a new tattoo, still tender and sore from having the new lover's name injected into his skin? Or is this an old tattoo with the name of a mysterious former lover? Hey, who is this person whose name is on the tattoo? Why is her name branded onto you? Such a wonderful haiku celebrating the possibilities of a new relationship with all its complications from the past. We like the excitement of new love in this senryu. He has shown his commitment with a new tattoo with her name. Everything’s new and exciting . . . and intimate as she fingers the tattoo. Did it hurt? Is it still sore? Next thing you know she will be kissing him, even if he has strep throat!
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