Haiku Society of America Senryu Award
in Memorial of Gerald Brady
Judges Commentary for 2009
Judges: w.f. owen & Johnny Baranski
It is always difficult judging another writer’s senryu when the judge feels he has much to learn about writing senryu himself, which is why it is good HSA policy to have two judges for its annual HSA Senryu Contest. We were able to bounce our ideas off one another and help each other discern what in our minds constituted the best Western equivalents of this Japanese genre among the 364 entries submitted to this year’s contest. From these 364 entries we found six to be worthy of final consideration, all of them reflecting the strengths or frailties of our human condition, some with humor or satire, and layered with more than one meaning.
We congratulate the winners for their best efforts as well as all who entered the fray (there were many senryu we liked), for it is only in entering it that we can learn a thing or two about ourselves in this sometimes harsh and dreadful but always interesting and hopeful world we live in.
First Place
the stylist
rinses away
the sound of her voiceBarry George (Philadelphia, PA)
The first place senryu is not just about noise but perhaps about information overload so indicative of our twenty-first century world. On the face of it we can relate to having an annoyingly chatty hair dresser or barber drowned out by the rush of the tap. In the big picture we yearn for those increasingly rare oc- casions when our modern day lives are just simply unplugged.
Second Place
their first Thanksgiving
posing together
with the turkeyMarilyn Appl Walker (Madison, GA)
The second place senryu speaks to the newness of relationships. It connotes a young couple, without children, whose next best thing is their first turkey. We imagine them home for the holiday, without a guest to take the photo, setting a camera timer grateful for one another’s presence and the hopes and dreams each brings to the table as they begin to build a future together.
Third Place
graduation day
in the gait of our son
your younger stridKathe Palka (Flemington, NJ)
The third place senryu is about a couple with a child whose academic success represents the realization of the future they have built. They see something of one another in him as he strides toward the dais to receive his diploma. Who among us would not be proud to see our legacy in whatever form it takes live beyond our too short years of this life.
Honorable Mention
Kona Wind
an ocean between me
and my worriesCarolyn Hall (San Francisco, CA)
Honorable Mention
new bride—
the squeak of her
sweet corn being shuckedBill Pauly (Dubuque, IA)
Honorable Mention
old timers' game
seventh inning stretch
the creaking of kneesTony Virgilio (Camden, NJ)